Iran FCMers

This is my first try on writing a screenplay. I hope to get your comments and seggestions so that I can Improve on it.

EXT. ROAD, TOWN - DAY

A coach is passing a road in a silent town. Buildings and
houses look normal but they have eyes and they are watching
the coach that is passing. No voices.

Kian is sitting in the coach that two tigers carry that
without any rider and he listens to music using an mp3
player. Kian has half open eyes with his lip and head up
and to the front and he concentrates on the music.
Everybody include Kian is silent. Kian has a funny face.

EXT. OTHER PART OF THE SAME TOWN - DAY

There are not much buildings and houses but trees and
plants at this part of the town. Two tall and huge rocks
are seeing.

Coach stops in front of one of these high and huge rocks,
Kian packs and leaves the coach to side of it gently and
friendly. a male look angle with the name "Angy" welcomes
him. He has long gray hair and beard and he is around 170
CM in height. He looks nice but Kian looks a bit angry.

ANGY
Ahoy! Hi Kian, I hope you are
strong don't worry about anything

He talks fast with a smile and eyes widely open as he is
stupidly happy. But Kian is vert serious.

KIAN
Strong? Then what I'm doing in
here?

Angy gets serious suddenly

ANGY
Show them you are right. I
believe in you.

KIAN
And that's how you helped me?

Angy hugs Kian and puts his arm around Kian's neck and
takes him to an elevator that leads to the top of the rock.
Kian calms down.

They get into the elevator to climb up the rock. The
elevator is designed in a strange way. It takes 7 seconds
for Kian and the angle to go top of the rock.

EXT. TOP OF THE FIRST ROCK - DAY

A female look angle is waiting for Kian and Angy, in front
of the elevator. She looks like a 30 year old woman. She
looks very nice and have smile on her face. She hugs Kian
gently. She is serious.

MANGY
My dear, I want you to be happy
like before, you have a great
heart

KIAN
Thank you

Mangy Kisses Kian on his cheek. Kian looks that have som
tears in his eyes.

Three of them get together and go back using the elevator.

EXT. DOWN PART OF THE FIRST ROCK - DAY

There is only one rail between the first and second rock
and the distance is not far and seem to be close. There is
only a simple station and a shop for selling tickets. The
rail is placed on a valley

Train is there on the rail and the ticket shop right beside
the train.

They walk to station to get the train. Mangy is holding
Kian and Kian is leaning mangy. The Ticket shop is placed
before train

ANGY
Three tickets please

Ticket Seller is a thin, hyperactive and funny guy looks at
Kian

TICKET SELLER
Good luck bro, don't let them to
put you down, say whatever it was
right, you ganna win the battle

Kian smiles, Angy collect the ticket and they get to the
empty train.

INT. TRAIN - DAY

They sit on chairs. Kian is in the middle and Angy and
Mangy are seating at right and left side of Kian.

Train starts to go slowly. Till they get to the other rock.

EXT. BELOW THE SECOND ROCK - DAY

They get out of the train. A muscular and gentle security
is standing beside the elevator.

ANGY
Hello

SECURITY
Hello, so this is our Kian?

ANGY
Yap

KIAN
Hi

SECURITY
Hello man! I hope they give you a
fair statement

KIAN
Thanks

Three of them smile and they get the elevator to climb up
the rock

EXT. TOP OF THE ROCK, COURT - DAY

The weather is quite good. There is a justice court. It is
a round place with no roof. It looks like a theatre place
that has a stage. A wooden table is on the stage and judge
that is a golden fish in a small aquarium. He has big eyes
and very angry he watches Kian all the time.

Two strange people are also at the corner of the court as
the jury. They have no movements and they are strange but
funny.

They go to seat on benches except Kian that goes in front
of the benches, the place where he is going to be accused.

God is also seating on one of the benches. He is colorful
mostly red. He looks nice and serious. He looks a bit like
an owl.

Pangy (Kian's sexual desire angle) standing in front of a
tall table.

Pangy is a thin, naughty and active angle he looks like a
male angle.He looks very angry and boredom. He taps his
fingers of his hand continuously on the table out of anger.

JUDGE
Get to your position

KIAN
I'm in my position sir

JUDGE
Okay, call case number 0123,
please read the bloody statement.

Secretary of judge is a young woman who looks educated

She collects the papers in front of her.

SECRETARY
The victim with the name Kian is
accused by Pangy, his sexual
desire angle, to not show his
love to three girls. In December
2005 Kian found a crush on a girl
and after giving him weeks by
nature he was not able to get
with the girl. In September 2006
He met the second girl that was
working in a company near Kian's
house, she wanted to have sexual
relation with Kian but Kian
denies her. In August 2007 Kian
meets the third girl who was a
promoter in a club and she became
a friend of Kian but then she got
angry of Kian and left him.

Judge jumps up and down and heat the table with the
aquarium

JUDGE
And I heard he brought witnesses
here

SECRETARY
Yes. Three witnesses. They are
God and the angels of Kian's left
and right shoulders

Judge jumps up and down again

JUDGE
OK, What do you have to defend
yourself boy?

KIAN
One day I went for dinner and i
saw a girl looking at me nonstop.
After one month I saw her again
at the same place with same
expression from her. I went for
her. After that I started dating
her, she was a cabin crew for an
airline.(Pause) She was very nice
to me and from her expression I
thought that she liked me just
the way I did. And I asked her if
I can be with her.

Pangy gets a bit angry

PANGY
But we and you, know that she
never answered your question

KIAN
I didn't asked any question. I
just told her I want to be with
her and she replied with her
expression

JUDGE
Explain more

KIAN
She called the day after we
dated, early in the morning
before she goes for her flight.
And she came to my room and we
kissed each other.

Kian stands more straight. The judge is still angry

Pangy looks he found something to say

PANGY
And why she left you?

Kian gets angry

KIAN
She had two boyfriends

PANGY
But that was not the reason she
left you

KIAN
Yes but the reason to not coming
back to me. I did everything for
her to come back
She only wanted to have fun with
me and not staying with me

JUDGE
Fun? (Pause) oh you mean sex!

KIAN
Yes, and I'm happy now I did not
do anything I didn't want to love
her more and just bother my sol.

Pangy looks satisfied and smiles

JUDGE
What happened to the second girl?

KIAN
It was also an accident by
nature. I was going to my
friend's apartment to meet him
but the door was locked I waited
there for a while and she
suddenly appeared, she was coming
back from her work and she had
the key because she was staying
there. She looked very fun and
super nice. The elevator was not
working at that time so we
climbed up the stairs all the way
to the 9th floor where she lived.
She was fun and smiling all the
time. I got her number and we met
after that. But in the first
placed she told me she is seeing
somebody.

PANGY
But you didn't give up. I
remember you bought her gifts.

KIAN
She said she is seeing somebody
this didn't mean she had a
fiance. She told me about her
fiance when I bought her gifts.

PANGY
But she liked you. You could
understand that. She came to your
house for so many times. Just
tell me what this means to come
to you room and you lock the
door, she became more romantic
and laid on your bed.. Hello!

Judge became very surprise

JUDGE
What? And you didn't have sex
with her?

Kian becomes sad

KIAN
I can't think of a day that I
have a fiancee and she sleeps
with other guys

PANGY
That's called a distance
relationship my friend

JUDGE
Tell us about the third girl

KIAN
The third girl was a very nice
accident to meet. I'm sure I
spent one of my happiest time of
my life when I met her. And again
nature got me to know her

JUDGE
Aha, that's not a good excuse
nature does it for everybody

KIAN
But this one was strange

JUDGE
And what was strange about it?

Kian bows his had down. He is sad. Looks he can not
continue talking.

Angy stands up gently

ANGY
Sir, I can explain more

everyone looks at Angy. Mangy also stands up

ANGY
Kian's friend came for a travel
to visit Kian. They decided to go
to a club on Thursday but me and
Mangy decided to not allow them
to go there.

MANGY (CONT'D)
When they get ready to go out of
house I brought one their friends
o their home unexpected and I
knew they were shy to reject him

ANGY
It went on till they left the
house after 12 a.m.
And that when they couldn't get
any money from banks to go to a
club

MANGY
Kian thought that he has money in
his pocket but when they got
there they fund out about their
budget.

ANGY
That was when they decided to go
to club the day after on Friday.

KIAN
And it was a special day. There
were not much people in the club
like Thursdays. I saw my friend
that changed a lot since i knew
him. He taught me how to cheer up
and be happy in a club. And I
liked it. He even introduced me a
girl who I could kiss and dance
with. The week after I wanted to
try another club but my friends
asked me to the same club! And
that was when I met Suki, the
third girl. (Pause) After that I
always wanted to go to that club
on Friday just because of her.
Everything was going alright

Suddenly Pangy cuts Kian's sentences

PANGY
Till one Friday you got drunk and
ruined everything!

Pangy starts walking to Kian with his hand on his back and
his eyes looking down.

PANGY
Although you asked her to be your
girlfriend and she denied of
course, like the other girls who
keep away when they hear that
stupid and unprofessional
question, but you still had time
to get her.

Kian gets silence and doesn't say anything

PANGY
Yes, you got drunk and she hated
you. You kissed your friends on
the cheek, dancing stupidly and
you were completely against her
feelings.

Judge beats the aquarium on the table for few times

JUDGE
May I have God to speak out?

GOD
Yes sir

God stands up and goes to seat on a chair in front.

He put his hand on his heart

GOD
I promise that I do not talk
abstract or philosophical but
simple and clear to everyone

God seats on the chair gently

JUDGE
Please

GOD
Kian really liked all the girls
he met. But he was too nice to
get with them. He had to act not
like himself.

JUDGE
We are not here to listen to your
suggestions please state whatever
you saw.

GOD
Err, okay. He tried as much as he
could to get the girls, specially
the first one. He even studies
about women. For the first girl
He most of the times woke up
early in the morning before her
flight to see her. And he even
got some psychological problem
and he used some pills for that.
Kian only liked the second girl
because he knew that she had a
fiance. But the third girl made
Kian very upset because he
assumed his second serious fail
in getting a lover. He always
wanted me to help him and the
good thing is he always tried to
learn more about his mistakes.

JUDGE
I assume I do not need the other
witnesses to show up

Judge jumps up and down to heat the table for three times.

He is still angry and shouting

JUDGE
I need to talk to jury. We will
continue in five minutes.

Jude jumps from the table and the leaves the court (he
moves by jumping up and down). two Juries follow him after

Kian put his hand on his head and thinking. Angy and mangy
come to seat beside him

And judge come back very soon

Strange juries also come in after the judge from a door at
the corner of the court

JUDGE
OK. Read the bloody statement

Everyone gets silence and serious to listen

SECRETARY
By the decision of jury, Kian is
unforgivable for the first two
girls that he did not have sex
with. But because he loved and
still loves the third girl truly
from his heart he is sentence to
compensate the penalty by showing
up a girlfriend in one month time
other wise his sexual desire
angle leaves him forever and he
might visit other sexual angels
that have different concept of
sexual orientation in life.